This Shibui is one of the earlier ones. In studying it, using my skills of art critiquing___ I would have to say this Shibui would be seen as “too busy!” It is! However the nature of a Shibui is what it is, and things are where they are! However, to make it less busy would mean that I not outline so much of what was there. The not outlined marks of medium (watercolor) would have receded a bit. Notice the ones at the top of the busy warring Shibui? Perhaps they are bits of dancing glass, at least that is where my imagination takes me!
I put in the circle because the shape found there looked like a person watching what was happening! I added lines that looked like mountains. These may have been the edges of light watercolor.
I added ground to give the sense of a landscape. A possible place for “it” to happen in. Shibui tend to come alive, they are fantastical, imaginary places. The life, the story is of its own telling.